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The best way to stay healthy
What’s the best way to stay healthy? Well, in my opinion, the best way is keeping balance diet and doing regular exercises at the same time.
We know, keeping balance diet and doing regular exercises are both good for health, but they have different effects.
Keeping balance diet can provide us the nutrition we need, like vitamin, protein, fat and other things. So keeping balance diet can let us be far away from the diseases caused by being lack of some chemicals, like anemia.
However, this is not enough. We also need strong body and immunity to stay healthy. And doing regular exercises can help us with this. It can stronger our bodies and improve the immunity, and since then influenza may have little chance to catch us.
As I mentioned above, keeping balance diet and doing regular exercise have different effects in keeping us healthy, so the best way for us to stay healthy is doing these two things simultaneously.

[balance diets] since you used exercises
(So keeping balance diet can let us be far away...) 我的个人问题 觉得这写比较好 So [ it - keeping balance diets 用太多了] can decrease the chance of obtaining diseases caused by malnutrition, such as anemia. (Or). So it can let us [stay away from]...
However, [that] is not enough.
We also need to have strong bodies and [immune systems] to stay healthy (你在后面用了复数). 不要用 and 开头. It can [strengthen] our bodies and improve our immunity. [Thus/therefore], influenza may have [a lesser] chance to catch us.
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