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标题: 四六级作文冲刺点拨:决胜关键在于创造闪光点 [打印本页]

作者: 幽幽草    时间: 2007-4-7 17:23     标题: 四六级作文冲刺点拨:决胜关键在于创造闪光点

四六级考试越来越使模板无用武之地,阅卷老师在阅卷的过程中更多的是关注同学们的用词和句型的使用。
高分作文标志:
  1、四级120-150字;六级150—180字;
  2、是否长短句交叉;
  3、用词是否恰当,准确,形象,尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词;
  4、关键词是否换用,切勿老用重复词;
  
高分作文注意事项:
  1.适当用被动代替主动,这样能更客观的反映事实,句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段:It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus,its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
  2.善于使用插入语,比如说把副词、连接词等,作插入语放在中间,一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
  如however / therefore /for example/I believe做插入语放在中间,一般放在动词,助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
  比如说:Other individuals, however, take the attitude that…
  3.一定要学会换词,换形象,具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,
  people, opinion等等)比如上面例子中,applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge代替enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)   
高分作文举例:
  Computer and I By Simmy
  I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
  exceedingly替换very
  thrilling替换exciting
  sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb替换sb. be interested in sth.
  google替换search
  an army of替换a lot of
  The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
  The dawn of the new century witnessed是一个精彩句型,用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;
  Increasing popularity替换more and more popular
  Coincident with…非常地道的词汇,表达“与…一致”的意思,替换With…
  Advancement替换development
  Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into
  Current ( currently )替换now
  Appeal to sb.替换sb. be interested in sth.
  Growing individuals替换more and more people
  It is no exaggeration to say经典句型,说某事是毫不夸张的
  For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
  For a start替换To begin with
  We can, freely, search用了插入语的写作手法
  our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened.用了非常精彩的被动
  Additionally替换In addition / Besides
  Deliver替换send
  There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
  There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings,这个句子有三个精彩之处,首先There is no denying that这个句型,还有however作为插入语,function in the disservice of替换do harm to
  Emerging代替appearing ( fading代替disappearing )
  Net citizen网民,属于精彩用词
  As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
  No garden has no weeds替换Every coin has two sides
  Computers do play,do强调
  Positive替换important / good等
  A slice of替换a part of
  Unfavorable替换bad
  Impacts替换effects / influences
  We should, therefore, take advantage of…使用插入语
  Fruits (而且fruits用的非常形象,merits/ virtues)替换advantage ( defects替换disadvantage )
  Facet替换aspect  
  由此可见,上面的作文里有这么多精彩的闪光点,作文怎么会不得高分呢!
  以下是30个最经典的替换词供参考。  
1: individuals,characters, folks代替(people ,persons)
  2: positive, favorable, rosy(美好的),promising
  (有希望的),perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding代替good
  3: dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad
  如果bad做表语,可以有be less impressive代替
  eg.An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls/boys or killing time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive.
  4: (an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,many,if not most)代替many.
  注:用many, if not most一定要小心,many后一定要有词。
  Eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that….同理用most, if not all ,代替most.
  5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some
  6: harbor the idea that, take the attitude that,
  hold the view that, it is widely shared that,
  it is universally acknowledged that)替think
  (因为是书面语,所以要加that)
  7: affair ,business ,matter代替thing
  8: shared代common
  9: reap huge fruits代替get much benefit )
  10: for my part ,from my own perspective代替in my opinion
  11: Increasing(ly),growing代替more and more(注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词,副词用increasingly.
  Eg.sth has gained growing popularity.
  Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.
  12: little if anything,或little or nothing代替hardly
  13: benefitial rewarding代替helpful be beneficial of
  14: shopper,client,consumer,purchaser,代替customer
  15: exceedingly,extremely代替very
  16: hardly unnecessary, hardly inevitable ...代替necessary,
  inevitable
  17: sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb代替sb take interest in
  18: capture one's attention代替attract one's attention.
  19: facet,demension,sphere代aspect
  20: be indicative of ,be suggesteive of ,be fearful of代indicate, suggest ,fear
  21: give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger代替cause.
  22: There are several reasons behind sth代替..reasons for sth
  23: desire代替want.
  24: pour attention into代替pay attention to
  25: bear in mind that代替remember
  26: enjoy, possess代替have(注意process是过程的意思)
  27: interaction代替communication
  28: frown on sth代替be against , disagree with sth
  29: to name only a few, as an example代替for example
  30: next to/virtually impossible,代替nearly impossible




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